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    Kasen: From Marriott
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      From: 23 September 2008
      To:     21 December 2008   
      Mandala
      D.Horse
      Anne
      Tina



                            mandala                                       

         from Marriott
         to a ruined palace
         ah autumn blast
                (Mandala)

           it was an interlude
           of the prolonged sandstorms
                (D.Horse)

         circles, squares, oblongs
         flag-maker's working in
         the moonlit atelier
                (Anne )

           all the full dress ships
           exchange gun salutes
                (mandala)

         press corps raided
         a sleepy fishing village,
         a white whale washed ashore
                (d.horse)

           run, little mermaid, run
           on your brand new feet
                (anne)

       ウ
         dear passengers
         we’ve crossed the date line
         April 1 now
                (mandala)


                mandala

           I've waited for hours in vain
           such a fool I took her words
                (d.horse)

         in a misty hue
         love romance started
         mobiles being turned off
                (anne)

           only I know that he is
           one of the justices of the SC
                (tina)

         to err is human,
         to forgive may not be
         his wife's policy
                (d.horse)

           come rain or come shine
           single-legged scarecrow
                (mandala)

         harvest moon
         almost falling down
         to the old pond
                (tina)

           up! up! to the highest
           the spire of the rock
                (anne)

         hey kids
         get aroused now with
         the Rolling Stones
                (mandala)

           I don't recall what I ate
           'twas only yesterday
                (d.horse)


                       mandala

         suddenly the game is over
         only the floral scent
         left behind
                (anne)

           on a thrown die
           a butterfly sits
                (tina)

      二オ
         walking in the spring breeze
         along the River Sumida,
         Vivaldi from a cardboard house
                (d.horse)

           the trio plays a piece or two
           at Four Seasons’s bar
                (mandala)

         eleven or twelve ?
         the big wall clock
         now strikes
                (tina)

           with full make up
           wiped off
                (anne)


                    Jakarta Art Museum

         nasty mirror !
         wrinkle wrinkle
         disasater
                (mandala)

           someday, I believe,
           my prince will come
                (d.horse)

         a limousine
         dragging tins and cans
         marriage of convenience
                (anne)


                                mandala

           they both have
           very good resons for it
                (tina)

         don't ask me
         why I dropped out of
         Harvard
                (d.horse)

           the mantra called me
           from another shore
               (mandala)

         and in me
         the Japanese
         came out strong
                (tina)

           fresh tea caddy opened
           farewell party started
                (anne)

      ナウ
         December moon
         lights up the marquee
         of Bedouins
                (mandala)

           camel bells from far away
           linger in the silence
                (d.horse)

         boys,
         never forget
         what your mother taught you
                (tina)

           lullaby goes on like this:
           pain! pain! fly away!
                (anne)

         flower to flower
         a butterfly flits around
         for life or for love
                (d.horse)

           may peace prevail on the earth
           glorious spring in the air
                (mandala)


               --------THE END OF KASEN: FROM MARRIOTT--------




      【2008.09.23 Tuesday 12:54】 author : 奥座敷従業員一同
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        昨年は、たのしいRenkuをご一緒させていただきありがとうございました。

        あらためまして
        A Happy New Year!

        Hokku 

        the dark red plum
        having a sigh out
        under pale stars

        in twos and threes
        the wild plum budding out---
        a drowsy moon

        よろしく  written by tina
        | tina | 2009/02/08 3:14 PM |
        みなさま

        味わい深い一巻の終わりを年内に迎えることができました。お付き合いいただきありがとうございました。

        よろしければ、年明け早々にも再開できればと思っております。

        anneさん、tinaさん、発句をお寄せください。

        では、みなさま、健やかな年の終わりと、めでたい年の初めをお迎えください。

        mandala
        | mandala | 2008/12/22 9:58 AM |
        boys,
        never forget
        what your mother taught you
        (tina)

        lullaby goes on like this:
        pain! pain! fly away!
        (anne)

        flower to flower
        a butterfly flits around
        for life or for love
        (d.horse)

        may peace prevail on the earth
        glorious spring in the air
        (mandala)

        | mandala | 2008/12/21 2:10 PM |
        ナウ
           December moon
           lights up the marquee
           of Bedouins (mandala)

             camel bells from far away
             linger in the silence (d.horse)

        boys,
        never forget
        what your mother taught you (tina)


        lullaby goes on like this:
        pain! pain! fly away!(anne)

        for #35

        flower to flower
        a butterfly flits around
        for life or for love
        (d.horse)


        what a shame
        all the cherry blossoms
        gone with an overnight storm
        (d.horse)

        bumblebees bumble
        from the mustard field
        to the violets in bloom
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/12/21 11:15 AM |
        ナウ
           December moon
           lights up the marquee
           of Bedouins (mandala)

             camel bells from far away
             linger in the silence (d.horse)

        boys,
        never forget
        what your mother taught you (tina)


        tuke
        a hundred famous mountains
        she's already covered them all

        a stamp album succeeded
        from great-great-grand father on

        throw it onto top of roof
        when milk tooth fallen

        lulluby goes on like this:
        pain! pain! fly away!

        | anne | 2008/12/21 12:11 AM |
        ナウ
         December moon
        lights up the marquee
         of Bedouins
                  (mandala)

        camel bells from far away
        linger in the silence
        (d.horse)

        for #33
        boys,
        never forget
        what your mother taught you

        I wonder
        why he changed his mind
        so easily

        incredibly
        he gave me a punch
        on the nose

        'matter of fact
        what occurred next
        surprised everyone
        (tina)
        | tina | 2008/12/15 6:03 PM |
        Thank you, Dr.Mandala for your suggestion. I like it. It seems that I didn't know where I was going.
        (Fortunately I came back home this evening from a short trip. Sorry for the delay.)
        d.horse
        | d.horse | 2008/12/14 6:45 PM |
        my suggestion:

        it's time for me to go
        black camel at the gate
        | mandala | 2008/12/10 6:24 PM |
        Dear Dr.Mandala

        enjoy your life before
        a black camel kneels before your door

        to be changed to:

        whisper into the black camel
        not to kneel before your door

        or

        whisper to the black camel
        not to kneel before your door

        (I like "into" but that'll also make the first line exceed 7 syllabels, then I must compromise with "to" instead.)
        What is your opinion?
        Pls help.
        d.horse
        | d.horse | 2008/12/10 10:29 AM |
        d.horse-san,

        A black camel that kneels before your door sounds exotic but has 9 syllables. Could you trim it up?

        | mandala | 2008/12/09 9:03 PM |
        #31)

        December moon
        lights up the marquee
        of Bedouins
        (mandala)


        for #32

        camel bells from far away
        lingers in the silence
        (d.horse)

        no foods, no drinks
        after sunrise

        forget about sheep, papa
        oil will spew down here

        another corruption scandal?
        it's a camel's nose

        enjoy your life before
        a black camel kneels before your door



        | d.horse | 2008/12/09 5:19 PM |
        30
        fresh tea caddy opened
        farewell party started 

        ナウ
        #31)

        December moon
        lights up the marquee
        of Bedouins
        (mandala)

        seated east and west
        Orion and Artemis
        winter constellation

        A Christmas Carol
        and Clair de Lune
        as mementoes
        | mandala | 2008/12/09 10:19 AM |
        don't ask me
        why I dropped out of
        Harvard    (d.horse)

        the mantra called me
        from another shore   (mandala)

        and in me
        the Japanese
        came out strong (tina)

        So preceding three verses all have got "me" at the end of the first lines. I think this repetition is amusing.
        I'm afraid there's no moon on this page, but I would rather pass it to other writers.

        tuke

        poems of autumnal eve
        three of them so famous

        fresh tea caddy opened
        farewell party started

        villagers all,
        casting done for local drama

        yorosiku (anne)

        | | 2008/12/07 10:39 PM |
         don't ask me
         why I dropped out of
         Harvard
                  (d.horse)

        the mantra called me
        from another shore
        (mandala)

        for #11

        and in me
        the Japanese
        came out strong

        you can take choice of
        road, rail, air,
        or water

        but
        I seldom do more of thinking
        than I have to

        we perhaps know that
        what is impenetrable to us
        really exists

        (tina)
        | tina | 2008/12/03 6:40 PM |
        27
        don't ask me
        why I dropped out of
        Harvard
        (d.horse)

        #28)

        unite and bomb them
        muslims of the world
        (mandala)

        nobody shared
        the trouble I had

        the mantra called me
        from another shore
        | mandala | 2008/11/30 5:07 PM |
        26)
        they both have
        very good reasons for it
        (tina)


        for #27
        Fifty percent off
        may be with subtle stain
        Seibu's bargain sale
        (d.horse)

        Don't ask me
        why I dropped out of
        Harvard
        (d.horse)

        Listen, I heard she divorced,
        her husband had long been hiding
        a big debt
        (d.horse)

        Cook that hen,
        she stopped laying
        golden eggs anymore
        (d.horse)


        | d.horse | 2008/11/29 6:05 PM |
        次からは
        d.horse
        mandala
        tina
        anne
        の順になります。
        | mandala | 2008/11/29 10:32 AM |
        24)
        Someday, I believe,
        my Prince will come
        (d.horse)

        25)
        a limousine
        dragging tins and cans
        marriage of convenience

        tuke for #26

        they both have
        very good reasons for it

        why do grownups take
        dreaming so seriously

        as far as myself
        nothing to complain of

        because it's nearly
        the time of snow

        (tina)

        yoroshiku!

        | tina | 2008/11/29 9:55 AM |
        Anne-san,
        Motto for museum curators:
         Let there not be much light!  Thou art so fair.
        | mandala | 2008/11/20 2:19 PM |
        Mandala-san,
        I wonder why Jakarta Art Museum is so dark?

        ----------------------
        23)
           nasty mirror !
           wrinkle wrinkle
           disasater
           (mandala)


        24)
        Someday, I believe,
        my Prince will come
        (d.horse)

        tuke for 25

        so young and so inexperienced
        he ruled the kingdom
        all alone

        a white horse seen
        on the cliff
        alongside the Euro-Star

        a limousine
        dragging tins and cans
        marriage of convenience

        yorosiku
        | anne | 2008/11/19 10:56 PM |
        22)
        with full make up
        wiped off
        (anne)

        23)
        nasty mirror !
        wrinkle wrinkle
        disaster
        (mandala)

        for #24

        Someday, I believe,
        my Prince will come
        (d.horse)

        Twinkle Twinkle Orion
        down on me and help
        (d.horse)

        The Queen and the King
        thus became at deadly feud
        (d.horse)

        You, go down to the market,
        get some apples for me
        (d.horse)


        | d.horse | 2008/11/13 11:41 AM |
        22)
        with full make up
        wiped off

        #23
        nasty mirror !
        wrinkle wrinkle
        disaster
        (mandala)


        22)
        shelter dogs waiting for
        patiently thier home


        #23
        new race starts
        up to 1600
        Pennsylvania

        come on-a my house
        but I don’t give you
        white bread to bite

        either black or white
        good friends must be
        non-allergic



        d.horse-san next

        | mandala | 2008/11/12 1:37 PM |
        次は
        mandala
        d.horse
        anne
        tina
        の順です。
        | mandala | 2008/11/12 11:01 AM |
        20)
        the trio plays a piece or two
        at Four Seasons’s bar
        (d.horse)

        21)
        eleven or twelve ?
        the big wall clock
        now strikes
        (tina)

        tuke for#22

        Yes we can
        on BBC news

        spots of lights in the night
        Peter Pan & Tinker Bell

        with full makeup
        wiped off

        shlter dogs waiting for
        patiently thier home
        | anne | 2008/11/11 10:58 PM |
        #19

        walking in the spring breeze
        along the River Sumida,
        Vivaldi from a cardboard house
        (d.horse)

        #20

        the trio plays a piece or two
        at Four Seasons’s bar

        tuke for #21

        a huge
        good-for-nothing pole stands
        in the middle

        I'm also
        a traveller
        in time

        eleven or twelve ?
        the big wall clock
        now strikes

        she's innocent enough
        to chuckle at
        a chapstick tumbling

        (tina)

        *Mandala-san, thanks a lot for your suggestion and icchoku.
        a die- it makes sense, and it sounds poetic. I agree with you.
        | tina | 2008/11/09 12:11 PM |
        <Notes: Die and Dice>
        Die is a singular in Americanism and dice is both singular and plural in British English with an exception of ‘The die is cast.’ Caesar crossed the Rubicon in January and a few months later a butterfly sit on the thrown die.
        | mandala | 2008/11/07 11:51 PM |
        19
        walking in the spring breeze
        along the River Sumida,
        Vivaldi from a cardboard house
        (d.horse)

        #20
        beneath bridge of Lethe
        much water has flowed
        (mandala)

        who sings the same old tune
        Siren or Lorelei?

        the trio plays a piece or two
        at Four Seasons’s bar
        | mandala | 2008/11/07 11:01 PM |
        (18)
        on a thrown dice
        a butterfly sits
        (tina)


        for No.19

        emerging on the desert
        a town of highrise buildings,
        mirage or daydream?
        (d.horse)

        sightseers at the table of
        Tavern on the Green watching
        spring-fevered New Yorkers
        (d.horse)

        walking in the spring breeze
        along the River Sumida,
        Vivaldi from a cardboard house
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/11/07 7:33 PM |
        次はNo.19、二オです。
        d.horse
        mandala
        tina
        anne
        の順になります。
        どーぞ。
        | mandala | 2008/11/07 1:37 AM |
        16)
        I don't recall what I ate
        'twas only yesterday
        (d.horse)

        17)
        suddenly the game is over
        only the floral scent
        left behind
        (anne)

        tuke for #18

        a yakuza from Osaka
        still on a swing

        on a thrown dice
        a butterfly sits

        tedious spring
        gloomy spring

        a gadget cat passed
        the gate of mirage

        (tina)

        Sorry for my kame response again.


        | tina | 2008/11/06 8:12 PM |
        15)
        hey kids
        get aroused now with
        the Rolling Stones
        (mandala)

        16)
        I don't recall what I ate
        'twas only yesterday
        (d.horse)

        tuke fo 17)
        suddenly the game is over
        only the floral scent
        left behind

        alongside the River Lethe
        trees in a row
        all in full blossom

        a shot of manhattan,
        singapore sling, cherry blossoms
        and so on and on
        (anne)


        | anne | 2008/10/31 4:47 PM |
        thanks, d.horse -san,
        senior citizens, senile friends, sinister alcoholics, let's dream together a rosy and lousy dream!
        | mandala | 2008/10/30 8:07 PM |
        15)
        hey kids
        get aroused now with
        the Rolling Stones
        (mandala)

        for No.16

        Imagine a rosy future
        you are only 75
        (d.horse)

        Let me be your man?
        Sorry, answer is no
        (d.horse)

        I don't recall what I ate
        'twas only yesterday
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/10/30 9:36 AM |
        14
        up! up! to the highest
        the spire of the rock
        (anne)

        #15)
        hey kids
        get aroused now with
        the Rolling Stones
        (mandala)

        funicolare
        a heavenly cable for
        death in Naples

        Allah Akbar
        a tower of bubble
        in oily sand

        Anneさん、the Urn についてご説明有難うございました。歌枕と奥の細道と希臘の壷にふれた英国詩人美と真実についての多重残像が生んだ『美の壷』でしたか。

        | mandala | 2008/10/28 1:25 PM |
        D.Horse様

        こちらこそ意味がどっちとも取れる英文つづりまして、失礼しました。
        ご丁寧なるご挨拶に、そもそも署名のし忘れがいかんと大反省でございます。でも、御加勢くださったのですよね。ありがとうございました。anne
        | | 2008/10/28 9:10 AM |
        Sorry, I mistook Anne-san's note as if he/she was angrily asking:

        It's me, anne.
        "Who wrote the anonymous note of tuke for #14 ?."

        That's why I thought it was mysterious; somebody, unnamed one, might have posted the verses for #14 without the knowledge of Anne-san. Was that possible at all? Please forget it.
        Very sorry for my confusing note.
        d.horse

        | d.horse | 2008/10/27 11:14 PM |
        Mandala様

        日本語でいうと
         八千草の野に壺のいしぶみ
        と言いたかったのです。
        先週、多賀城へ参りまして。

        壺は、jarとかpotより
        ジョン・キーツのオード「ギリシャの壺に寄す」Ode on a Grecian Urn
        のurnがいいかと思ったのでした。
        | anne | 2008/10/27 10:23 PM |
        次からは
        mandala
        d.horse
        anne
        tina

        の順です。

        ところで、Anneさん、the Urn は何の洒落こうべ?

        mandala拝
        | mandala | 2008/10/27 10:06 PM |
        It's very mysterious.
        I took it for granted that the verses for #14 were provided by Anne-san. I was about to ask mandala-san what will be the order of the next round. Of course, It was not me,
        d.horse

        | d.horse | 2008/10/27 3:43 PM |
        It's me, anne, who wrote the anonymous note of tuke for #14 .
        | anne | 2008/10/27 1:37 PM |
        #12
        come rain or come shine
        single-legged scarecrow
        (mandala)

        #13
        harvest moon
        almost falling down
        to the old pond
        (tina)

        tuke for #14

        among some eight thousand grasses
        a stone monument of the Urn

        Is he going to
        autumnal pigrimage soon?

        up! up! to the highest
        the spire of the rock

        when young they used to play
        with a boat of grass

        yorosiku
        | | 2008/10/24 9:00 PM |
        Thanks a lot, mandala san.
        This time it seems o.k.. it goes through!
        | tina | 2008/10/15 8:24 PM |
        まんだらさま
        英語連句頁に書き込みができません。なぜかわかりませんが?
        とりいそぎ、次のメッセージをアップよろしくおねがいいたします。

        ーーーーーーーーーーーーーーー

        Sorry, I kept you waiting so long.

        #12
        come rain or come shine
        single-legged scarecrow
        (mandala)

        for
        #13

        harvest moon
        almost falling down
        to the old pond

        hallucination?
        I'm sure I heard
        Ponyo singing a song

        holding
        in his arms
        a bunch of cosmoses

        somehow
        a ringing in my ears
        from yesterday morning

        (tina)

        Also, I would like to tell you that
        in my verse #10,
        the SC (or S.C.) was ment
        (Japanese) Supereme Court,
        as D.horse san has already mentioned.

        Please leave the word as the SC

        It does not matter to me
        either Japanese SC or US SC ,though.

        Thank you.

        | mandala on behalf of tina | 2008/10/15 7:57 PM |
        Let me change:

        come rain or come shine
        stands one-legged scarecrow

        to:

        come rain or come shine
        single-legged scarecrow.

        Because of the redundancy of 'one'.




        | mandala | 2008/10/08 6:47 PM |
        Whether he is one of the justices of Supreme Court or that of South Carolina,
        it sounds funny that 11)to err is human and to (if you don’t’ mind, add ‘to’) forgive may not be his wife’s policy (d.horse).

        #12
        don’t shoot an arrow
        to wrong direction
        (mandala)

        out of this world now
        bye-bye Xanthippe

        come rain or come shine
        stands one-legged scarecrow

        | mandala | 2008/10/07 9:51 PM |
        10)
        only I know that he is
        one of the justices of the SC
        (Tina)


        assuming SC was meant "supreme court",

        for #11

        French or Japanese?
        Italian or Chinese?
        you, indecisive man!
        (d.horse)

        while doing yoga practice
        I was thinking
        what to cook for dinner
        (d.horse)

        to err is human,
        forgive may not be
        his wife's policy
        (d,horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/10/07 5:49 PM |
        さて、次は、
        d.horse
        mandala
        tina
        anne
        の順でございます。
        よろしくお願いいたします。
        | mandala | 2008/10/06 11:57 PM |
        aya ya!

        The first line of my second verse
        should be read as

        La Belle et la Bete (French)

        yorosiku!

        | tina | 2008/10/05 2:03 PM |
        Good afternoon, everone!
        Thanks a lot for letting me
        join again the thrilling party.
        I will try to catch you guys up.

        Let's see...

        I chose Anne-san's

        in a misty hue
        love romance started
        mobiles being turned off
        (anne)

        then, for #10

        only I know that he is
        one of the justices of the S.C.

        la Belle et la B&ecirc;te
        Claimer vs. Claimer

        how do you spell
        ぽにょin English ?

        to love or not to do
        that is a question

        (tina)
        | | 2008/10/05 1:57 PM |
        7)
        dear passengers
        we’ve crossed the date line
        April 1 now
        (mandala)

        8)
        I've waited for hours in vain
        such a fool I took her words
        (d.horse)

        for (9)
        he loves me, yes or not
        endless is the fortunetelling
        of daisy
        (anne)

        into Akihabara maid cafe
        slipped a black cat
        with her seven kittens
        (anne)

        in a misty hue
        love romance started
        mobiles being turned off
        (anne)

        Considering the preceding two verses have springtime in them,
        I tried to continue the third verse of spring.

        | anne | 2008/10/04 9:40 AM |
        Thank you, D.Horse-san.
        Anne-san, could you take No. 9? Tina-san, please take No. 10, if possible.
        | | 2008/10/01 7:48 PM |
        7)
        dear passengers
        we’ve crossed the date line
        April 1 now
        (mandala)

        for #8

        who cares?, I'm travelling
        to the land of eternal youth
        (d.horse)

        I've waited for hours in vain
        such a fool I took her words
        (d.horse)

        if you get to a lonesome town
        stay at Heart Break Hotel
        (d.horse)




        | d.horse | 2008/10/01 4:16 PM |
        6)
        run, little mermaid, run
        on your brand new feet
        (anne)

        7.
        at the scene
        the man froze up and said
        ‘revolution’
        (mandala)

        when the sunshine
        starts melting the snow on
        the Khyber Pass

        dear passengers
        we’ve crossed the date line
        April 1 now
        | mandala | 2008/09/30 3:36 PM |
        Than you, Dr Mandala.

        (5)
        press corps raided
        a sleepy fishing village,
        a white whale washed ashore
        (d.horse)

        tuke for (6)

        atishoo sounded, and children
        all called "Bless you!"

        run, little mermaid, run
        on your brand new feet

        orangutan held fast
        to that forest ranger tall
        | | 2008/09/29 6:00 PM |
        thanks, d.horse-san.
        anne-san, No.6 is yours.
        mandala
        | mandala | 2008/09/27 11:59 PM |
        (4)
        all the full dress ships
        exchange gun salutes
        (mandala)

        May I offer just one for No.5:

        press corps raided
        a sleepy fishing village,
        a white whale washed ashore
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/09/27 7:02 PM |
        3.
        circles, squares, oblongs
        flag-maker's working in
        the moonlit atelier
                  (Anne )

        (4)
        all the full dress ships
        exchange gun salutes
        (mandala)

        find the golden section
        in the pyramid site

        who will win and who will lose
        the race enters final stage

        next, d.horse-san.

        | mandala | 2008/09/26 9:39 PM |
        Anne-san has e-mailed me:

        I wrote my verse on the boad, but strangely enoufh it disappeared.

        Net-system is always a mystery for me, so before making somethig false, I repeat it on this mail.

        Best wishes,
        Anne

        tuke for 3)

        circles, squares, oblongs
        flag-maker's working in
        the moonlit atelier
        ( anne )

        まるしかく旗屋は月の工房に
        (In case you want it in Japanese)

        Then, Tina-san too mailed that she is busy for themonent and is joining in from October.

        Mandala will take No.4.

        mandala
        | mandala | 2008/09/26 5:47 PM |
        Good afternoon.
        I am happy to come again.

        from Marriott
        to a ruined palace
        ah autumn blast
                  (Mandala)

             it was an interlude
             of the prolonged sandstorms
                  (D.Horse)

        tuke for 3)

        circles, squares, oblongs
        flag-maker is workig in
        the moonlit aterier
        | | 2008/09/26 1:06 PM |
        Dear d.horse,

        Thanks for new ideas but let us go ahead without revisions this time.

        mandala
        | mandala | 2008/09/25 10:00 AM |
        C)
        that'll blow off lull
        before another sandstorm
        (d.horse)

        sorry for the mistyping.
        | d.horse | 2008/09/24 11:00 PM |
        Dear Dr.Mandala,

        I have a second idea. I am a little confused, please fix the second verse whichever you think will fit better....and let us go ahead!

        A)
        it was an interlude
        of the prolonged sandstorms

        B)
        it was an intermezzo
        of the prolonged sandstorms

        C)
        that'll blow of lull
        before another sandstorm
        (d.horse)


        | d.horse | 2008/09/24 10:56 PM |
        Dear d.horse,

        Hmmm...you say the word is less weighty. What about putting 'intermezzo' instead of 'interlude'?
        | mandala | 2008/09/24 6:42 PM |
        I agree to your suggestion...the incident was too loud and deadly to call it an interlude, though.
        Thank you, d.horse
        | d.horse | 2008/09/24 3:05 PM |
        It was a prelude
        to the prolonged sandstorms
        (D.Horse)

        We watched the operations, beginning from Desert Storm in 1990, then leading to Enduring Peace in 2001 and Iraqi Freedom in 2003……the prolonged sandstorms. So, I’d like to suggest it might be logically more persuasive if ‘a prelude’ is changed to ‘an interlude.’

        it was an interlude
        of the prolonged sandstorms
        (D.Horse)
        | mandala | 2008/09/24 11:27 AM |
        May I take the honor of the second place:

        It was a prelude
        to the prolonged sandstorms
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2008/09/24 9:05 AM |
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