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      ¡¡¡¡¡¡18 September - 1 December 2007
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡by Fujiwara Toshiyuki, D. Horse, Mandala and Tina


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡mandala


      ¡¡¡¡not visible
      ¡¡¡¡but tangible; the wind
      ¡¡¡¡autumn is here
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡ (fujiwara toshiyuki/d. horse)


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡on tatami with bare feet
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡evening is a bit chill
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡a moon
      ¡¡¡¡swaying on the water
      ¡¡¡¡in a tin tub
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡I got it for you,
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡my little boy
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d. horse)

      ¡¡¡¡he¡Çs a mushroom
      ¡¡¡¡to grow in the air
      ¡¡¡¡huge and lethal
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡the light at the street
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡now turns green
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡mandala

      ¥¦
      ¡¡¡¡sipping coffee
      ¡¡¡¡biting pretzels
      ¡¡¡¡life is a rush
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d. horse)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡frozen voices float
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡as diamond dust dances
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡someone left
      ¡¡¡¡one of a pair of
      ¡¡¡¡brand-new snow boots
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡did anyone see
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡a pumpkin coach last midnight?
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d. horse)

      ¡¡¡¡sunset to sunrise
      ¡¡¡¡curfew is imposed
      ¡¡¡¡in the capital
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡the pie should be cut
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡for seven kids even
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡I dont have a mansion
      ¡¡¡¡nor am I a yachtie
      ¡¡¡¡moon and six pence in pocket
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡the isle is in haze
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡a distant silhouette
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡I believe
      ¡¡¡¡fairies of that blooming hamlet
      ¡¡¡¡are all in a doze
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡on a lovely spring day
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡my pa and mom met
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡her smile is a blur
      ¡¡¡¡in the warmth of the night
      ¡¡¡¡ah Diana
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡quarrelsome fisherman
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡has quitted drinking since
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      Æó¥ª
      ¡¡¡¡a wreck of a boat
      ¡¡¡¡on the deserted beach
      ¡¡¡¡soughing of palm trees
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡mandala

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡from a hillside desa
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡comes soulful gamelan
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡somehow
      ¡¡¡¡my nose itches --
      ¡¡¡¡gleamy weather
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡no love stories on TV
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡attract Darby and Joan now
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡couch potatoes
      ¡¡¡¡beside the fireplace
      ¡¡¡¡unmoving
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡bull or bear
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡the stockbroker is wavering
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡onto chilly streets
      ¡¡¡¡people dissipate for weekends
      ¡¡¡¡crescent moon hanging in the sky
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡they harvest strange fruits
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡of the southern tree
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡because
      ¡¡¡¡it's almost
      ¡¡¡¡All Hallows' day
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡Fra Angelico, National Gallery, London¡¡

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡a girl, all dolled up
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡knocked on my door
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡crepe suzette
      ¡¡¡¡not an apple pie
      ¡¡¡¡for tonight
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡he lost his interest
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡in monastic life anymore
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¥Ê¥¦
      ¡¡¡¡I cannot hold
      ¡¡¡¡until the Great Wall
      ¡¡¡¡falls down
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡in a snowstorm
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡nomads are starving
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)

      ¡¡¡¡his wife forgot
      ¡¡¡¡to put chopsticks
      ¡¡¡¡in his lunch box
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡a rustle at the front door
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡spring air wafted in
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(d.horse)

      ¡¡¡¡oh Florence
      ¡¡¡¡Flora springs out of
      ¡¡¡¡la Primavera
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(mandala)


      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡Primavera, Sandro Botticelli, Uffizi

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡innumerable butterflies
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡flew the sea off
      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡(tina)

      ¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡¡ ----The End of Kasen: Not Visible But Tangible----

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        All is well that ends well! This has been a fascinating challenge. Thank you all.

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        | mandala | 2007/12/02 2:26 PM |
        #35(Hana)
        oh Florence
        Flora springs out of
        la Primavera
        (mandala)

        for the last verse:

        innumerable butterflies
        flew the sea off
        (tina)
        I hope this works out.
        | tiny tina | 2007/12/01 6:05 PM |
        please finalize this volume with a single shot!
        | mandala | 2007/11/24 5:16 PM |
        33)
        his wife forgot
        to put chopsticks
        in his lunch box
        (tina)

        34)
        a rustle at the front door,
        spring air wafted in
        (d.horse)

        tsuke 35)

        wake up now
        trees are in full blow
        Shangri-la
        (mandala)

        how florescent
        come on to the garden
        for a deep breath

        oh Florence
        Flora springs out of
        la Primavera

        | mandala | 2007/11/24 1:54 PM |
        sorry, again.

        above
        b)should be

        cry of a kitten,
        aroma of the feast
        (d.horse)

        | d.horse | 2007/11/24 12:20 PM |
        32)
        in a snowstorm
        nomads are starving
        (mandala)

        33)

        his wife forgot
        to put chopsticks
        in his lunch box
        (tina)

        for #34

        a)
        a rustle at the front door,
        spring air wafted in
        (d.horse)

        b)
        cry of a ketten,
        aroma of the feast
        (d.horse)

        c)
        toward the hazy hill top
        moving yellow caps in single file
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2007/11/24 12:17 PM |
        The last message was tina. Sorry.
        | tiny tina | 2007/11/20 10:53 PM |
        31)
        I cannot hold
        until the Great Wall
        falls down
        (d.horse)


        32)
        in a snowstorm
        nomads are starving
        (mandala)

        tuke for#33

        his wife forgot
        to put chopsticks
        in his lunch box

        hey!
        the stray badger
        making for the kitchen

        certainly
        the chief has got
        false teeth

        it doesn't seem
        as if anyone will be
        back soon


        (tina)

        Sorry again for my kamekame response.
        | | 2007/11/20 10:46 PM |
        30)
        he lost his interest
        in monastic life anymore
        (tina)

        31)
        I cannot hold
        until the Great Wall
        falls down
        (d.horse)


        32)
        in a snowstorm
        nomads are starving
        (mandala)


        cold days, dark nights
        exile to Siberia

        crossing the Rubicon
        icy water splashes

        | mandala | 2007/11/09 9:22 PM |
        #29
        crepe suzette
        not an apple pie
        for tonight
        (mandala)

        #30
        he lost his interest
        in monastic life anymore
        (tina)

        for #31
        a)
        I heard renewed
        Cinema Paradise will come back
        to this town
        (d.horse)

        b)
        I cannot hold
        until the Great Wall
        falls down
        (d.horse)

        c)
        a well-known designer predicted
        short skirts will be
        back in fashion next year
        (d.horse)

        | d.horse | 2007/11/07 9:39 PM |
        #28
        a girl, all dolled up
        knocked on my door
        (d.horse)

        #29
        crepe suzette
        not an apple pie
        for tonight
        (mandala)

        tuke #30

        the mayor's monkey
        suddenly screams out


        an active fault
        runs under the city

        he lost his interest
        in monastic life anymore

        that reminds me
        an appointment with my doctor

        (tina)
        | tiny tina | 2007/11/06 7:40 PM |
        27)
        because
        it's almost
        All Hallows' day
        (tina)

        28)
        a girl, all dolled up
        knocked on my door
        (d.horse)


        #29)

        crepe suzette
        not an apple pie
        for tonight
        (mandala)


        can you hear
        Ravel¡Çs Bolero?
        dolce vita

        your California castle
        is burnt to the ground
        sorry sir
        | mandala | 2007/11/02 10:18 PM |
        Sorry again,
        The last sender of the comment was d.horse.
        I am prone to making thins in a rush. This is true to my way of making verses, almost intuitively. Please, everybody, do not mind and take your time to continue. sincerely...d.horse
        | d.horse | 2007/11/01 12:11 PM |
        #26
        they harvest strange fruits
        of the southern tree
        (mandala)

        for #27 and #28

        a)
        because
        it's almost
        All Hallow's day
        (tina)

        a girl, all dolled up
        knocked on my door
        (d.horse)


        b)
        Song of Solomon
        left half-read --
        autumn deepens
        (tina)

        a glass of wine
        was enough for my nightcap
        (d.horse)
        | | 2007/11/01 11:53 AM |
        A little notice :
        As for my verse #27,
        Jomon-were should be read as Jomon-ware.
        Sorry <(_ _)>.
        | tiny tina | 2007/10/31 11:47 AM |
        #26
        they harvest strange fruits
        of the southern tree
        (mandala)

        #27
        because
        it's almost
        All Hallow's day

        I heard
        a scarecow whispering
        and then sobbing around

        Song of Solomon
        left half-read --
        autumn deepens

        an autumn butterfly
        just fluttering
        away

        an Jomon-were vessel
        throwned down
        on the dewy grass

        (tina)



        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/31 12:12 AM |
        Dear D. Horse,
        Let the moon rise whenever and wherever you want to see it, Haikai solons used to say. Yours was a nice moon too.
        Mandala
        | mandala | 2007/10/28 10:47 PM |
        Dear Mr. Chairman,

        Sorry, I realised I had put the moon at the wrong place. I had mistakenly referred to the moon at No.24 whereas it should have been mentioned in No.29. Please rectify properly and leave the moon to its right place No.29.
        If some irregularity is allowed, please let it go as it was. What is your comment? d.horse
        | d.horse | 2007/10/28 10:01 PM |
        For #26

        24)
        bull or bear
        the stockbroker is wavering
        (tina)

        25)
        onto chilly streets
        people dissipate for weekends
        crescent moon hanging in the sky
        (d.horse)

        26)
        through Pantheon columns
        blows the autumn wind
        (mandala)

        mummies salute pharaoh
        a dewy ancient morning

        they harvest strange fruits
        of the southern tree


        | nandala | 2007/10/26 11:25 AM |
        b)
        24)
        don't touch on
        my white piano
        (tina)

        25)(correction for mistyping)
        glowing like daytime
        moonlit snow field was celestrial
        sound of silence
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2007/10/23 8:48 PM |
        23)
        couch potatoes
        beside the fireplace
        unmoving
        (mandala)

        for No.24 and 25

        a)
        24)
        bull or bear
        the stockbroker is wavering
        (tina)

        25)
        onto chilly streets
        people dissipate for weekends
        crescent moon hanging in the sky
        (d.horse)


        b)
        24)
        don't touch on
        my white piano
        (tina)

        25)
        glowing like daytime
        moonlit snow field was celestrial
        sound of solence
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2007/10/23 8:35 PM |
        tsuke No. 23 &24

        couch potatoes
        beside the fireplace
        unmoving
        (mandala)

        unrest
        even it's a Christmas

        bull or bear
        the stockbroker is wavering

        a crimson sweater sent from
        an inn of the northern province

        don't touch on
        my white piano

        (tina)

        Mandala-san, D.horse-san,
        I'm very sorry for that I've been a quite big kame.
        - "hamlet"and "desa" -both nice!
        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/23 2:58 PM |
        21)
        somehow
        my nose itches --
        gleamy weather
        (tina)

        22)
        no love stories on TV
        attract Darby and Joan now
        (d.horse)


        tsuke No. 23)

        couch potatoes
        beside the fireplace
        unmoving
        (mandala)

        embraceable you
        my hot water bottle
        irreplaceable

        past is dream
        future is vision
        winter twilight
        | mandara | 2007/10/16 10:11 PM |
        20)
        from a hillside desa
        comes soulful gamelan
        (mandala)

        for #21 (­¶-3) and #22

        a)
        all of a sudden
        a forgotten memory
        returned to me
        (tina)

        Grandma boiled red rice for me
        on my 7th birthday
        (d.horse)

        b)
        shut the windows !
        hide your belly button !
        it's a thunderstorm
        (tina)

        we might take a nap
        until afternoon glow comes back
        (d.horse)

        c)
        somehow
        my nose itches --
        gleamy weather
        (tina)

        no love stories on TV
        attract Darby and Joan anymore
        (d.horse)
        (d.horse
        | d.horse | 2007/10/15 3:55 PM |
        Dear Tina,

        Thank you very much for your comment and suggestion. Well, ¡Æhamlet¡Ç is a small village and ¡Æfairies of that blooming hamlet¡Ç may sound nicer than ¡Æblooming village.¡Ç And then, about #20, I would like to use the word ¡Ædesa¡Ç (a village community in Java, Bali, Madura, Webster¡Çs Third New International Dictionary, 1976) instead of ¡Ævillage¡Ç because it is harmonious with gamelan.

        | mandala | 2007/10/14 8:36 PM |
        19)
        a wreck of a boat
        on the deserted beach
        soughing of palm trees
        (d.horse)

        20)
        from a hillside village
        comes soulful gamelan
        (mandala)

        Tuke for #21 (­¶-3)

        all of a sudden
        a forgotten memory
        returned to me

        shut the windows !
        hide your belly button !
        it's a thunderstorm

        a chieftain's peacock
        with its tail feathers spreading
        makes a round trip

        somehow
        my nose itches --
        gleamy weather

        (tina)

        * Mandala-san, thank you very much for your
        kind and reasonable correction on my verse #18.
        It came smoother and natural.

        Let me say about one more thing--
        Why don't we make some revision on my verse of #15, as for example the word "village" to
        "hamlet" ,so that we could avoid a repeat of the same (meaningful) word ? --I know it may be a trivial matter and such a repeat is not always against the renku rules, however--

        Well, I'm not too much sure about the accurate meaning of the word "hamlet" though ^^;.
        Let's see--

        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/14 3:23 PM |
        18)
        quarrelsome fisherman
        has quitted drinking since
        (tina)

        19)
        a wreck of a boat
        on the deserted beach
        soughing of palm trees
        (d.horse)

        20)
        the queen has rattlesnakes
        tattoed on her back
        (mandala)

        from a hillside village
        comes soulful gamelan

        gathering in Leyte
        the remains of soldiers

        | mandala | 2007/10/13 11:55 AM |
        17)
        her smile is a blur
        in the warmth of the night
        ah Diana
        (mandala)

        For #18 and #19

        a)
        quarrelsome fisherman
        quitted drinking a while ago
        (tina)

        a wreck of a boat
        on the deserted beach
        soughing of palm trees
        (d.horse)

        b)
        Zephyr puffs
        her gauze-like coat
        (tina)

        dark clouds in the sky
        crows make noise around
        a herald of storm coming
        (d.horse)


        | d.horse | 2007/10/12 9:27 PM |
        her smile is a blur
        in the warmth of the night
        ah Diana
        (mandala)

        Tuke For #18

        there were somebodies and nobodies
        at the shipboard party

        falteringly
        a Sicilian talkes about the past

        quarrelsome fisherman
        quitted drinking a while ago

        Zephyr puffs
        her gauze-like coat

        she is not rich
        neither does she wish to be

        (tina)


        ---Now we settled annoying moon and blossom verses. Marvelous!



        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/12 1:18 AM |
        15)
        I believe
        fairies of that blooming village
        are all in a doze
        (tina)


        16)
        on a lovely spring day
        my pa and mom met
        (d.horse)



        17)
        lunar rainbow
        beyond buds of May
        Yosemite
        (mandala)

        zephyr embraces
        crescent watches over
        a vernal eve

        her smile is a blur
        in the warmth of the night
        ah Diana

        | mandala | 2007/10/10 3:05 PM |
        second try for #15 and #16

        A)
        elephant or dinosaur ?
        I saw today
        in the blooming woods
        (tina)

        for your graduation
        I insist bottoms up your glass
        (d.horse)

        or

        do not wake him up, please
        bumblebees, with your buzz
        (d.horse)

        B)
        I believe
        fairies of that blooming village
        are all in a doze
        (tina)

        like this lovely spring day
        my pa and mom met
        (d.horse)


        | d.horse | 2007/10/10 12:44 PM |
        One more question, Mr. Chairman,

        Is "graduation" accepted as Spring? (In the most western countries, graduation is in September, I guess)

        How about these?

        for your graduation
        I insist bottoms up your glass
        (d.horse)

        On this lovely spring day
        my pa and mom met
        (d.horse)
        | d.horse | 2007/10/09 12:48 PM |
        Dear Mr. Chairman,

        I knew 3 consecutive Spring verses are required to this place. I was in the mood of Spring by these words "new venture" and "like today". Are these not good enough? More specific words of Spring like "kigo" are required in this place? If so, please let me think, and I will rectify the previous submission. Thank you.
        | d.horse | 2007/10/09 12:22 PM |
        Dear D. Horse,

        Verse #16 should have been that of spring since #14 and #15 have the spring season words, haze and blooming. Are you brave enough to break through the old-fashioned renku rule? Or, are you happy to follow the classic rule? Please let me know.

        | mandala | 2007/10/09 11:57 AM |
        Sorry, again.
        The sender of the comment No.22 was d.horse
        | d.horse | 2007/10/08 4:09 PM |
        14)
        the isle is in haze
        a distant silhouette
        (mandala)


        for #15 and #16

        A)
        elephant or dinosaur ?
        I saw today
        in the blooming woods
        (tina)

        for your new venture
        I insist bottoms up your glass
        (d.horse)

        B)
        I believe
        fairies of that blooming village
        are all in a doze
        (tina)

        on the day like today
        my pa and mom met
        (d.horse)

        | | 2007/10/08 4:06 PM |
        the isle is in haze
        a distant silhouette
        (mandala)


        Tuke for #15

        under blossoms
        flutist almost forgets
        about his tenosynovitis

        elephant or dinosaur ?
        I saw today
        in the blooming woods

        I believe
        fairies of that blooming village
        are all in a doze

        one fine day
        one physician started his practice
        by one blooming dale

        (tina)
        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/07 11:03 PM |
        14)
        with Easter hats on
        groupies run after you
        (mandala)

        a spring breeze comes wafting
        the sweet Bali Ha¡Çi

        the isle is in haze
        a distant silhouette

        How about mentioning ¡Æthe flower¡Ç in No.15, then, ¡Æthe moon¡Ç in No. 17?


        | mandala | 2007/10/05 5:06 PM |
        dear chairman,

        yottie may be American which suggests he is a very rich man. I found this only in Eijiro dictionary. yachtie may fit better in this verse. I thought I had to bring the moon for No.13 but I did not even notice the sun and the moon should not be too close. Fortunately the moon this time was the a fake moon, not the moon itself, like figurative flowers. please accept the moon as a book.
        d.horse
        | d.horse | 2007/10/04 1:38 PM |
        11)
        sunset to sunrise
        curfew is imposed
        in the capital
        (mandala)

        12)
        the pie should be cut
        for seven kids even
        (tina)

        13)
        I dont have a mansion
        nor am I a yottie
        moon and 6 pence in pocket
        (d.horse)

        Yottie is a new spelling of yachtie, isn¡Çt it? We had ¡Æsunset and sunrise¡Ç in No.11. and have now ¡Æmoon¡Ç in No.13. While some renku-traditionalists do not particularly like this kind of uchikoshi sequence, we claim what we have in pocket is a book., not the moon itself.

        | mandala | 2007/10/04 11:26 AM |
        11)
        sunset to sunrise
        curfew is imposed
        in the capital
        (Mandala)

        for #12 and 13
        a)
        the pie should be cut
        for seven kids even
        (tina)

        I dont have a mansion
        nor am I a yottie
        moon and 6 pence in pocket
        (d.horse)

        b)
        listen!
        the temple bells ring
        (tina)

        kids hurrying for supper
        crows flying to nests
        the moon in the east
        (d.horse)
        | d. horse | 2007/10/03 11:17 PM |
        sunset to sunrise
        curfew is imposed
        in the capital
        (Mandala)

        <for #6 Folio­µ Back>
        I want to see
        the really blue sky

        the pie should be cut
        for seven kids even

        listen!
        the temple bells ring

        marbles started
        to fall down the hill
        (tina)


        ---Sorry for my "kame" response.
        | Tiny Tina | 2007/10/03 9:20 PM |
        9)
        someone left
        one of a pair of
        brand-new snow boots
        (tina)


        10)
        did anyone see
        a pumpkin coach last midnight?
        (d. horse)

        11)
        in darkness
        on a silver screen
        that¡Çs the Potemkin
        (mandala)

        sunset to sunrise
        curfew is imposed
        in the capital

        a mud pie
        melts down to nothingness
        a morning rain


        | mandala | 2007/10/01 2:08 PM |
        Sorry, the previous posting No.13 was sent without sender's name. Pls note the sender was d. horse.
        Thank you.
        | d. horse | 2007/09/29 12:20 AM |
        8)
        frozen voices float
        as diamond dust dances
        (mandala)

        for #9

        a)
        as far as I know
        Mrs. Robinson loves
        penguins
        (tina)

        Laugh about it
        Shout about it
        (Paul Simon)

        b)
        someone left
        one of a pair of
        brand-new snow boots
        (tina)

        Did anyone see
        a pumpkin coach last midnight?
        (d. horse)

        c)
        she's a granddaughter
        of a survivor
        of the Titanic tragedy
        (tina)

        I wish I could propose her
        a cruise for honeymoon
        (d. horse)
        | | 2007/09/29 12:12 AM |
        frozen voices float
        as diamond dust dances
        (mandala)

        for #9

        as far as I know
        Mrs. Robinson loves
        penguins

        penguin chicks
        one after another
        jump into the icy ocean

        someone left
        one of a pair of
        brand-new snow boots

        she's a granddaughter
        of a survivor
        of the Titanic tragedy
        (tina)
        | Tiny TIna | 2007/09/28 9:12 PM |
        7.
        sipping coffee
        biting pretzels
        life is a rush

        for No.8
        frozen voices float
        as diamond dust dances
        (mandala)

        muscles and energy
        now in winter sleep

        penguins stand and jostle
        a howling blizzard

        | mandala | 2007/09/25 2:54 PM |
        Dear D. Horse, I think your ideas are urbane and charming. The stanzas are, however, as you have mentioned, close to the preceding ones. So allow me to make small revisions and blur the image, which is too clear now:


        6.
        the light at the street
        now turns green
        (tina)

        7.
        sipping coffee
        biting pretzels
        life is a rush

        | mandala | 2007/09/24 10:08 PM |
        he¡Çs a mushroom
        growing in the air
        huge and lethal
        (mandala)

        for No.6 and 7
        (just for two seasons. although they might be too close to the preceding ones. what do you say, chairman?)

        a)the light at the street
        now turns green
        (tina)

        people rush to work
        with a coffee at one hand
        wiping sweat off with the other
        (d. horse)

        a)people in this town
        wear too much
        (tina)

        streets filled with officegoers
        with hot coffee in one hand,
        with the other in the pockets
        (d. horse)
        | d. horse | 2007/09/24 2:15 PM |
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        | mandala | 2007/09/24 12:36 PM |
        he¡Çs a mushroom
        growing in the air
        huge and lethal
        (mandala)

        for #6

        something black
        rolling down the icy slope ¡¡(tina)


        people in this town
        wear too much

        the light at the street
        now turns green

        under the naked tree
        someone jostles away


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        | Tiny Tina | 2007/09/23 10:53 PM |
        3.
        a moon
        swaying on the water
        in a tin tub
        (tina)

        4.
        I got it for you,
        my little boy
        (d. horse)

        tsuke for 5

        he¡Çs a mushroom
        growing in the air
        huge and lethal
        (mandala)


        I¡Çve thrown it away
        ¡Æcause too heavy to hold
        the premiership


        inshallah
        beneath the arid soil
        rich oilfields



        | mandala | 2007/09/22 6:53 PM |
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        | mandala | 2007/09/21 11:11 PM |
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        | mandala | 2007/09/21 9:44 PM |
        2)on tatami with bare feet
        evening is a bit chill
        (Mandala)

        for 3)
        a) a moon
        swaying on the water
        in a tin tub
        (tina)

        I got it for you,
        my little boy
        (d. horse)

        b) for the moon
        lyrist brought a flute
        flutist brought an inkstone
        (tina)

        Why not a glass of wine
        for a blissful moment
        (d. horse)
        | d. horse | 2007/09/21 9:24 PM |
        (Waki)
        on tatami with bare feet
        evening is a bit chill (Mandala)

        (Daisan)
        a) a moon
        swaying on the water
        in a tin tub (tina)

        b) for the moon
        lyrist brought a flute
        flutist brought an inkstone

        c) musicians
        undulating like
        moonlit pampass grass

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        | Tiny Tina | 2007/09/21 2:12 PM |
        Not visiblel
        But tangible; the wind
        Autumn is here

        tsuke

        on tatami with bare feet
        evening is a bit chill
        (Mandala)

        pampas grass rustles
        a night of sleeping out
        | mandala | 2007/09/19 4:23 PM |
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